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Writer’s Prompt: The Water Park Betrayal: A Dark Noir Flash Fiction

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Two years of love vanished in a single splash at a water park, leaving Marcy with a tire iron and a thirst for blood.

Writer’s Prompt

The neon sign outside the motel buzzed like a trapped hornet, casting a rhythmic, sickly violet glow across Marcy’s face. She didn’t look like a woman whose heart had just been pulverized; she looked like a woman who had finally found the missing piece of a jagged puzzle.

For two years, the fifteen-year age gap between her and Todd felt like a bridge to maturity. His long hauls on the road were just the cost of their quiet life. But at the water park, under the unforgiving glare of the midday sun, the “road” had a face. It had a minivan. It had three laughing children who carried his nose and his eyes, and a woman who wore a wedding ring that looked a lot older than two years.

“He’s not coming home late because of the freight, Sheila,” Marcy whispered, her voice as dry as a desert floor. She stared at the cheap bottle of bourbon on the nightstand. “He’s coming home late because he’s playing house in a different zip code.”

Sheila sat on the edge of the bed, the smell of chlorine still clinging to her skin. “Marcy, don’t. We just leave. We pack your things and disappear.”

“I don’t want to disappear,” Marcy said, turning to her friend. The violet light hit her eyes, turning them into two dark, bottomless pits. “I want him to stop moving. Permanently. Will you help me, or am I doing this alone?”

Sheila looked at the door, then at the heavy tire iron Marcy had pulled from the trunk. The silence in the room grew heavy, suffocating, and dark. Sheila reached out, her fingers hovering over the cold steel.


How does the night end? Does Sheila take the steel, or does she run for the police? You decide the final blow in this tale of betrayal.

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