Grammar Tip: Sentence Writing

Don’t use unnecessary instances of “which,” “as,” “with,” and “while;” use modifiers instead.

Two example: 1.  Change the sentence, “I drove down the freeway, which made me feel carsick” suffers from the “which.” TO: “I drove down the freeway, feeling carsick.” Example 2: “The teacher cleaned her desk while listening to The Beatles.” TO:  “The teacher cleaned her desk, listening to The Beatles.”

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